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our open will be a great experience for you to enjoy. Whether you are bored and have nothing to do, or you just want a good ,solid learning experience about something you've never done before. I promise you this, you will enjoy our services once you are here and you may leave with most gear than when you walked in. our raffles will be kits that include, Muay Thai gloves and mitts, we will also give away shin guards, shin guards and a head protection gear. You can also win private lessons with our top instructors. Stop by to have fun and get some fight experience on the way.
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• "the open house will be from 11:00AM to 6:00PM." - The Open House will be Saturday, October 1, 2016 from 11:00 a.m. to 6:00 p.m.
• "we are hosting this open house to invite our fighters and aspiring members into the MMA community. Classes for this day are free for non-members, we are doing this so that you can get a taste of the type of training we offer our training center." - Classes for this day are free so aspiring members of the MMA community can meet our fighters and experience the type of training we offer.
• "We will also be doing a raffle in which you could walk away with some prizes." - Raffles include prizes for . . .
• "we will also have a judo contest where you can throw down with our top judo instructor Raul, winner can go home with a Hayabusa Gi." - A judo contest against our instructor Raul will allow one lucky winner to go home with a Hayabusa Gi.
Overall, you can tell you are knowledgeable and passionate about the MMA industry. You have numerous grammar errors, especially lack of capitalization.